Tuesday, 18 August 2015

Writing

WALT retell a Myth / legend from a country we are researching.
Co-constructed SC:

Make sure your information is correct and if there are a variety of versions, choose the most well known
keep your writing in order:
beginning, middle and end
make sure you have your plan
put it into your own words
use more interesting words, 
time connectives - suddenly, later, unexpectedly, meanwhile, next minute...after that
proof read your writing
highlighter strategy

Editing your story is a very important  - Make sure you read it through carefully and check:
Will your story make sense to your reader and will it interest them?
Have you given a satisfactory ending?
Is your spelling correct?
Make sure you have used a range of punctuation ,  .  !  “  “  ?  (  ) 
 Start a new paragraph for:
•A change of time, e.g. Early the next morning…
•A change of place e.g. On the other side of the mountain stood…
•A change of action e.g. At that moment the lights went out.
•A change of character e.g. Unexpectedly, Dr Townley rounded the corner.


In the Beginning of time there was nothing but pure darkness and water. Nothing moving or breathing. After many ages a small ripple started, from beneath the ripple a big white flower appeared. The flower opened and the petals created a light. In the very centre of the flower, there was Atum a god child. He stood up and gazed upwards for his first look into the world and amazingly the flower pulled him back down to the watery depth. It happened  over and over again. Atum grew lonely with nobody to talk to but light. So he blew across the palms of his hands and in all directions a gust of wind started circulating around him and then it swept away, this was Shu god of air. Atum tried so hard to blow over his hands again he kept doing it over and over again. There were drops of moisture in every direction it was the amazing Tefnut, goddess of rain and dew.  Shu and Tefnut liked to play together, they raced about in big circles chasing each other on the surface. Shu blew wind storms that turned into waves, Tefnut threw down rain to make the waves flat again. Shu was blustery. They were awesome together. They had two children Geb the God of earth and Nut the goddess of the sky. Atum was upset because the God and goddess were too close together so he couldn't make the trees and animals. He told Shu to get between them. Shu lifted Nut even higher untill she arched over Nut. Finally the world was complete and he called other gods like the gods of love, wisdom and justice to rule this world. But Thoth the god of wisdom took pity on Nut, he said, "you shall have children and I will make extra days for you to have them". So Thoth visited Khonsu the God of the moon checkers with light and dark moonstones. The checkers decided how many days there were in a year. He gave her 5 days. Nut gave birth to Osiris on the first day, Horus on the second, Seth on the third, Isis on the forth and Nepthys on the fifth. Atum grew old so he left Osiris in charge of the earth and he said "I will retire to the heavens." So Nut took him and lifted him to heaven. Each morning Nut gathers a gold disk from Atum from the East to the West.

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