Monday, 24 August 2015

Writing-WALT to write a myth

keep your writing in order:
beginning, middle and end
make sure you have your plan
put it into your own words
use more interesting words, 
time connectives - suddenly, later, unexpectedly, meanwhile, next minute...after that
proof read your writing
highlighter strategy

Editing your story is a very important  - Make sure you read it through carefully and check:
Will your story make sense to your reader and will it interest them?
Have you given a satisfactory ending?
Is your spelling correct?
Make sure you have used a range of punctuation ,  .  !  “  “  ?  (  ) 
 Start a new paragraph for:
•A change of time, e.g. Early the next morning…
•A change of place e.g. On the other side of the mountain stood…
•A change of action e.g. At that moment the lights went out.
A change of character e.g. Unexpectedly, Dr Townley rounded the corner.

On an alien planet there is a guy called Bob who is  an alien inventor/nerd. He has a hot shot brother called Qwade. On his planet Qwade is a hero and he is always on the move with missions. Now for the story I am going to tell you. Qwade is  assigned a mission to make contact with another species. He hops in to his awesome green space ship and blasts off for the planet that the alien species live on. What he does not know is that the species is deadly. Three space hours later he is entering the atmosphere of the swampy planet. He lands near the alien life base then he sets off a trap and gets caught in a net. Communications are low he has enough power to contact his brother and say "help". Then they chuck him in to a prison cell and leave him there. Now back on their planet Bob was building a wearable machine to rescue people. When it had every thing but it needed a power source  to start it. That power source  is found on the meca planet so he packed his bags and set off to the meca planet for the power source. On his space ship he intercepted a call from  his brother it was the help message. Bob said"this is the perfect time to try my invention once I get that power source." We are just landing on the meca planet. He locates the power source in a cave in a volcano he jumps in to his space suit on. And jumped on to the metal planet meca. Then he make his way through the cave into the volcano. The heat levels are rising high he looks for the energy he sees an orb hovering above lava he activate his hover board and flyies to the orb and using a container he grabbed the energy orb. The cave started to collapse on him he flys out on his hover board and shots out of the volcano. He heads back to his ship to go home  and put on his machine and headed to the alien planet. He landed safely on the planet.,then he saw his brothers space ship he walked in to the alien base and set an alam off. Then he saw the species and it was horrible they had huge teeth and big eyes. He shot it in the tummy and then it lay silent. He ran through the base he found his brother and ran to his ship and flew off back to ther planet. 


Tuesday, 18 August 2015

Writing

WALT retell a Myth / legend from a country we are researching.
Co-constructed SC:

Make sure your information is correct and if there are a variety of versions, choose the most well known
keep your writing in order:
beginning, middle and end
make sure you have your plan
put it into your own words
use more interesting words, 
time connectives - suddenly, later, unexpectedly, meanwhile, next minute...after that
proof read your writing
highlighter strategy

Editing your story is a very important  - Make sure you read it through carefully and check:
Will your story make sense to your reader and will it interest them?
Have you given a satisfactory ending?
Is your spelling correct?
Make sure you have used a range of punctuation ,  .  !  “  “  ?  (  ) 
 Start a new paragraph for:
•A change of time, e.g. Early the next morning…
•A change of place e.g. On the other side of the mountain stood…
•A change of action e.g. At that moment the lights went out.
•A change of character e.g. Unexpectedly, Dr Townley rounded the corner.


In the Beginning of time there was nothing but pure darkness and water. Nothing moving or breathing. After many ages a small ripple started, from beneath the ripple a big white flower appeared. The flower opened and the petals created a light. In the very centre of the flower, there was Atum a god child. He stood up and gazed upwards for his first look into the world and amazingly the flower pulled him back down to the watery depth. It happened  over and over again. Atum grew lonely with nobody to talk to but light. So he blew across the palms of his hands and in all directions a gust of wind started circulating around him and then it swept away, this was Shu god of air. Atum tried so hard to blow over his hands again he kept doing it over and over again. There were drops of moisture in every direction it was the amazing Tefnut, goddess of rain and dew.  Shu and Tefnut liked to play together, they raced about in big circles chasing each other on the surface. Shu blew wind storms that turned into waves, Tefnut threw down rain to make the waves flat again. Shu was blustery. They were awesome together. They had two children Geb the God of earth and Nut the goddess of the sky. Atum was upset because the God and goddess were too close together so he couldn't make the trees and animals. He told Shu to get between them. Shu lifted Nut even higher untill she arched over Nut. Finally the world was complete and he called other gods like the gods of love, wisdom and justice to rule this world. But Thoth the god of wisdom took pity on Nut, he said, "you shall have children and I will make extra days for you to have them". So Thoth visited Khonsu the God of the moon checkers with light and dark moonstones. The checkers decided how many days there were in a year. He gave her 5 days. Nut gave birth to Osiris on the first day, Horus on the second, Seth on the third, Isis on the forth and Nepthys on the fifth. Atum grew old so he left Osiris in charge of the earth and he said "I will retire to the heavens." So Nut took him and lifted him to heaven. Each morning Nut gathers a gold disk from Atum from the East to the West.

Math-WALT fractions





Wednesday, 12 August 2015

Reading-WALT summarise using headlines.

These are some of my headlines from the story "Costumes and Fashion"

Trunks are all you need.

Happy fun ways to dress.

No changes, traditionally beautiful.

Monday, 10 August 2015

Reading - WALT to summarise

Here are some of my summaries 

Chapter 1 - What are whales and dolphins 
They are like humans and they come in all shapes and sizes.

Chapter 2 - Body bits 
Some whales have two blow holes and some have one blow hole.

Chapter  - The weird and wonderful 
It is all about the special features of whales and dolphins. 


Thursday, 6 August 2015

Writing

 WALT write a recount about an idea we had in our writers notebook.

Success Criteria - Co constructed

we need our plan beside us to look at our ideas
make sure it's true and it makes sense
put it in the right order
use descriptive words - e.g. enormous, giant, speechless, flabbergasted etc
proof reading ask someone else to read it
use a dictionary / thesaurus - make your writing more interesting to draw the reader in
use punctuation
use the highlighter strategy - gold for goal and pink for think

I am nearly in the ally, I was so scared because of all the screams. Then we entered the tent to zombie ally. The guard gave the pistols to Dad and I.  Then the guard near the exit showed use how to shoot, he said, "if you shoot the zombies in the head they will go mad."We were just walking in to the dark ally way, then all of a sudden a zombie burst out and said"Raaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!" I was so scared that I ran the rest of the way. But then I got cornered, I used both of my bullets and shot them right in the tummy. They moved and I sprinted to the light and I made it to the guards, I was safe. The guards said, "you may have been sprayed with zombie blood. Then I walked throw the zombie blood detector and it buzzed on me and they gave me the antidote... an apple zombie chew.